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Eugenia P. Frankenberg 🥀's avatar

Your visuals and dominion of language are super spot on, I could imagine everything happening perfectly. The prose is beautiful! My only suggestion (if you’re accepting those) is to let us know a little bit of what the characters are feeling in the moment and about the grand scheme of things. Great chapter!

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interesting chapter indeed!! not even halfway through reading i really stopped and went back to Spotify to play Dash by PLAVE. that song really goes well with this chapter, not gonna lie. reading this chapter slowly reaaallly gave me chills. i can't even pinpoint my favorite part, for real. it's like i witnessed the intense fight and was even suffocated by the fire itself. so good, kudos!! keep up with the good work <3

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